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He strode silently, regretfully, into the ever-darkening room. It was just another offset of her puzzling, maze-like mansion of a home, though he visits weren’t frequent, or often enough, to really justify it’s title as such. This, however, was a special day, depending on how you interpreted it.
He knew he should have knocked, instead of just barging in on her, but he also realized that she wouldn’t have acknowledged it anyway. Though he was afraid to venture across the vicinity of her room, mainly for the reason that he didn’t know how to comfort her. Instead, he merely lingered in the doorway, her doorway, glancing around the room, trying to stall the inevitable, until he finally couldn’t prevent his eyes from resting upon her.
She sat silently, nearly silhouetted, in her bright window, which looked rather obscure in her now Endarkened room. However, he could still see that she looked extravagant as always. Her long, black hair was curled, for once, and had been fashioned into a very flattering up-do. Her makeup was exquisite, though a little risqué, almost bordering on gothic, as was per usual, and her preference. She also wore a long black dress, though it was practically hidden by her best trench coat, but even that couldn’t hide the combat boots she had chosen for today.
She slowly turned her pale, but still beautiful face towards him, but he could tell that she wasn’t really looking at him, rather through him. He definitely knew what she was thinking though; this was a day that she was expected to show her weakness, and she just couldn’t do that.
“Hey, we’ve got to go. We’re late as it is.” Lexi said on her way through the rest of the house.
After Lexi had definitely scurried off, she remained in the window for a few moments longer, before making her way heavily to the door. She probably felt like she was wading through her misery today, or so he figured.
She had hesitated before she reached the door, but he could see that she didn’t have the heart to look up at him.
He could have sworn that she had whispered, “ I love you,” shortly after she had passed by him, but he thought a more appropriate dismissal would have been, “I Blame You.”
©2008-2009 ~your-fave-bhl
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Author's Comments

ASKHSLKHDKSSF
First of all, the only person in there that's one of my characters is Lexi, hence, her name being mentioned.
Uhm anyway, this was a daydream I had earlier. Also kind of inspired me a little for other things.
But, for the important things;


THIS IS DEDICATED TO THE FOLLOWING FOR THEIR MASSIVE AND INCREDULOUS SUPPORT, OH YEAH, AND APPARENTLY, LITTERACY; :iconleft-for-yesterday: :iconendarkened: :iconrogueharle: :iconwarrior-oji: :icongothicwolfcorpse: AND ANYONE ELSE WHO COMMENTED ABOUT ME LEAVING DEVIANTART

Ha ha ha, if your actually reading this, and wondering if I'm a little ticked off that most of you didn't notice I was gone (with reasonable exceptions of course, I know that some of you don't have internet etc. but some of you come-on-like-for-real-you-guys), I Really Friggin' AM


Ahem, now then, I really want whoever actually read this to brutally critique it for me, because I know it sucks. Ha.
However, writing is a minor hobby that I love :D
I love it so much even that I changed my other account just for that :iconurfavebhl:

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:iconwarrior-oji:
;v; aaw that was beautiful :love: thankz never nuff, your also very sweet,

lovely,

thanks for dedicating it to me, and all the others^^
:iconyour-fave-bhl:
Thank you :)

And you're so welcome, I know it's not really much, but I thought you deserved something. Escpecially since you cared enough to say something about it :hug:

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Yes, Princess, a thoroughbred artist: a poet with no poems, a painter with no pictures, a musician with no music. I despise ready... made art, the banal result of vulgar effort. My life is my work and dedicated to my love for you.
:iconwarrior-oji:
i had to say something, i was a must,
i wanted o scram at you not to do it XD.

and reassurance is most needed in a time like this,
it will repel feelings of going forward with the acts.
:iconyour-fave-bhl:
LOL screaming always helps XD
I agree though, I probably would have lost it if I didn't have somebody there to reassure me, like you :iconimhappyplz:

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Yes, Princess, a thoroughbred artist: a poet with no poems, a painter with no pictures, a musician with no music. I despise ready... made art, the banal result of vulgar effort. My life is my work and dedicated to my love for you.
:iconrogueharle:
A lovely piece of writing-- I love writing so yeah, I was like squee! Lol. It kind of reminds me of 'Great Expectations' though maybe just the imagery and all.

For something so short it really spoke volumes, emotions, and with only minor grammatical mistakes I have to say bravo. :)

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:iconwarrior-oji:
lucky you,
we both have a family who doesn't understand and isn't there for us,
well my mom does care, but most of the time.. i don't see it, i only see her as a nuisance now. > for all the times she hurt me deeply.

so yes, i really only have you guys here^^
:iconyour-fave-bhl:
Same here. It's quite hindering at times too.

But hey, the best people are here :D

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Yes, Princess, a thoroughbred artist: a poet with no poems, a painter with no pictures, a musician with no music. I despise ready... made art, the banal result of vulgar effort. My life is my work and dedicated to my love for you.
:iconyour-fave-bhl:
Lol, I'm honored to be compared to 'Great Expectations,' it actually used to be one of my favorite books.

Thank you though :D :hug: I tried to instill (sp?) the emotions I felt when I first thought of it.
But uhm, would you mind pointing out those grammatical errors? I understand if you don't though :)

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Yes, Princess, a thoroughbred artist: a poet with no poems, a painter with no pictures, a musician with no music. I despise ready... made art, the banal result of vulgar effort. My life is my work and dedicated to my love for you.
:icongothicwolfcorpse:
OMGness. To be honest i'm not a good writer, so I dont really have any good critique to give you, but I love her description. I just love it all over! I love the mystery and the random little comments on the mans observations. And I love the ending. Its awesome. And now I feel special :) Faved.
But there is a few errors in there-
"though he visits weren’t frequent, or often enough,"
should be
"though his visits weren't frequent, or often enough"
and
"which looked rather obscure in her now Endarkened room" seems a bit iffy to me, Endarkened doesn't need a capital letter and I think it should be "which looked rather obscure in her darkened room"
and "I Blame You" should be "I blame you", but you might have done that on purpose for emphasis, I dunno.

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